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This is a collaborative comic between Rukis and Alectorfencer. Red Lantern will be premiering weekly right here on FA, and at http://www.red-lantern.net/ . The free version of the comic will tell the entire story. The eventual printed release will have extra content, and adult content.
This comic is rated R for adult language, adult situations, violence, and themes of war, prostitution, and slavery.
rukis is responsible for all writing, and character artwork/color
alectorfencer is responsible for all background elements, scenery, and landscapes
This is a collaborative comic between Rukis and Alectorfencer. Red Lantern will be premiering weekly right here on FA, and at http://www.red-lantern.net/ . The free version of the comic will tell the entire story. The eventual printed release will have extra content, and adult content.
This comic is rated R for adult language, adult situations, violence, and themes of war, prostitution, and slavery.
rukis is responsible for all writing, and character artwork/color alectorfencer is responsible for all background elements, scenery, and landscapes
Category Artwork (Digital) / General Furry Art
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File Size 632.6 kB
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I don't think Amon's personal preference matters one diddly-bit. He's a manwhore, and as such he'll screw what he's told to screw, be it a guy, a girl or an ashtray, or he's in trouble. x3
Also, that statement of yours is just a bunch of propaganda, the purpose of which is to make people lower their guard so the male hyenas can get the drop on them when they least expect it =P
Also, that statement of yours is just a bunch of propaganda, the purpose of which is to make people lower their guard so the male hyenas can get the drop on them when they least expect it =P
Well we all know who the bitch in this is.
Turned out fantastic Rukis. I really love all the details that you and alectorfencer have put into this. Keep it up please
Turned out fantastic Rukis. I really love all the details that you and
alectorfencer have put into this. Keep it up please 
That was awesome! The text does look a lot better for the setting, and I love Amon in this, he reminds me of how I would act. And the Hyena is quite lovely.
Even though this is one of the few pages with dialogue, I felt like I've learned so much about these characters is the last few pages, really well drawn and written.
Even though this is one of the few pages with dialogue, I felt like I've learned so much about these characters is the last few pages, really well drawn and written.
Looks good, although I have two little nitpicks:
1. "marginally more useful" sounds more natural than "less useless"
2. For the font, a handwriting font would compliment the art better than the print one currently. You could try HansHand (http://www.dafont.com/hans-hand.font), it's one I use often and one that doesn't look too shabby.
1. "marginally more useful" sounds more natural than "less useless"
2. For the font, a handwriting font would compliment the art better than the print one currently. You could try HansHand (http://www.dafont.com/hans-hand.font), it's one I use often and one that doesn't look too shabby.
I believe the font looks much better, personally, it seems to really fit in with the scenery and gives the characters a little more...eh, accent you could say. By that I mean its easier to imagine them with some sort or accent than plain speech and is still fairly easy to read =] miss tiger there is especially lovely in that panel
also just as a slight suggestive and I hope I dont get beat down for this, because I almost didnt notice it, but second panel I may suggest revision on either the perspective/angle on her nose or around her eyes. Seriously not being a killjoy or anything and you may know better than I do, it just kind of appears to me that something is a little off... not by much though, I promise! don't beat me! *ducks and hides*
also just as a slight suggestive and I hope I dont get beat down for this, because I almost didnt notice it, but second panel I may suggest revision on either the perspective/angle on her nose or around her eyes. Seriously not being a killjoy or anything and you may know better than I do, it just kind of appears to me that something is a little off... not by much though, I promise! don't beat me! *ducks and hides*
Thanks for the work :)
Some feedback!
The font:
The rounder font is nice in its own way, and fills the balloons better too, but the space between letters (or lack thereof) makes it much more difficult to read. I'd try at least see if I could change the font spacing somehow.
The hyena:
It's been remarked by others and I have to agree: She looks too canine and not hyenid enough...
Some feedback!
The font:
The rounder font is nice in its own way, and fills the balloons better too, but the space between letters (or lack thereof) makes it much more difficult to read. I'd try at least see if I could change the font spacing somehow.
The hyena:
It's been remarked by others and I have to agree: She looks too canine and not hyenid enough...
Really nice comic so far.
Do you mind if I offer some critique and suggestions for future pages? Go ahead and stop reading if you prefer not.
You guys have some great characters, writing, and rendering going on, but you're also running into some of the common pitfalls that folks new to comics (Or that never learned better) fall into, the biggest one being flow and layout. There's no structure or planning to your composition or flow; nothing leading the eye from one panel to the next or one word bubble to the next, so the reader has to stumble around trying to figure out what order to read it in.
maggock actually made an excellent tutorial that covers precisely this: http://innerspace.notonigon.com/?p=8
A possible fix for this page might be to mirror panels four and five. At the moment because the backgrounds of panels three and four match, I can't figure out the orientation of the tiger, so mirroring her would connect her line of sight with the character she's speaking to and thus lead the eye straight to her despite the word bubbles trying to lead the eye from three to five. Mirroring five would keep the continuity as well as lead the reader into the following page.
Hope that helps!
Do you mind if I offer some critique and suggestions for future pages? Go ahead and stop reading if you prefer not.
You guys have some great characters, writing, and rendering going on, but you're also running into some of the common pitfalls that folks new to comics (Or that never learned better) fall into, the biggest one being flow and layout. There's no structure or planning to your composition or flow; nothing leading the eye from one panel to the next or one word bubble to the next, so the reader has to stumble around trying to figure out what order to read it in.
maggock actually made an excellent tutorial that covers precisely this: http://innerspace.notonigon.com/?p=8A possible fix for this page might be to mirror panels four and five. At the moment because the backgrounds of panels three and four match, I can't figure out the orientation of the tiger, so mirroring her would connect her line of sight with the character she's speaking to and thus lead the eye straight to her despite the word bubbles trying to lead the eye from three to five. Mirroring five would keep the continuity as well as lead the reader into the following page.
Hope that helps!
well I sample colors from page to page, and the backgrounds are all from larger compositions which Alectorfencer does in chunks, rather than day by day (keeps things uniform), so we keep the color palette the same. We also storyboard out each page, before jumping directly into working on it. But it IS a difficult workflow, due chiefly to the fact that Alectorfencer and I are at opposite ends of the globe, and we primarily work online. . . so there's a lot of back and forth. Other than storyboarding, sampling, and using character sheets, I think all we really need is more time and experience to get the flow down a bit more smoothly. The comic will hopefully evolve as it goes.
The other problem that I think makes it hard to read is that you're reading it week by week, rather than page after page. Hopefully once it's printed, it'll flow a bit more smoothly?
The other problem that I think makes it hard to read is that you're reading it week by week, rather than page after page. Hopefully once it's printed, it'll flow a bit more smoothly?
I was specifically talking about continuity in the breakup of the panels from page to page - It doesn't look disconnected in colors, characters, theme or setting - all of those both of you have nailed perfectly, but the physical layout. It might be different when it's all printed and ready, but just giving some insight from random person reading this. I don't have any knowledge when it comes to comic set-up, I was just going by how it 'feels'.
Both of you keep up the great work though, it's great. :)
Both of you keep up the great work though, it's great. :)
I have to agree with what others are saying about the character which I'm guessing is a hyena, she looks more wolf like then hyena; which have shorter broader muzzles and more angular ears. Even your felines have a little bit of canine syndrome happening.
Other then that I love your color and detailing looks great, and I am enjoying the new text bubbles.
Other then that I love your color and detailing looks great, and I am enjoying the new text bubbles.
I'm gonna be a bother and say that the new font is pretty distracting.
...Can't please everyone, right?
Have you heard of blambot.com? It's a whole site full of fonts designed specifically for comics. A lot of them are goofy, superhero-type fonts, but there are plenty that are just plain readable while still looking as though they were done by hand.
...Can't please everyone, right?
Have you heard of blambot.com? It's a whole site full of fonts designed specifically for comics. A lot of them are goofy, superhero-type fonts, but there are plenty that are just plain readable while still looking as though they were done by hand.
Alright, since no one else has said ANYTHING about this, I will.
The noses/muzzles in the second panel are off in terms of perspective. You have them looking like their noses and muzzle tips are turning at an angle while their heads are in a profiled view. Not to be mean, but this is...yea.
The noses/muzzles in the second panel are off in terms of perspective. You have them looking like their noses and muzzle tips are turning at an angle while their heads are in a profiled view. Not to be mean, but this is...yea.
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