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Buxom snow leopard and beefy lioness
Your favorite (maybe) medical synth
Futuristic space opera setting
Slow burn romance
Out on the fringe of known space, the planet Chelios orbits a strange blue star that gives off unique radiation. While the Astral Research Orbital Station observes it from up close, Chelios City on the planet's surface provides a space for civilians to live and other research to be conducted. So when Auri's best friend, who left for the planet years ago, offers her a spare room in her new apartment, the snow leopard leaps at the chance for adventure - and to be beside the lioness again. But for Zevah, a gregarious and enthusiastic lioness, having Auri within paw's reach again stirs up buried feelings...
The beginning of a new setting for Auri and friends n.n I've hit a wall on Northend ideas for a while, so this will help shake things loose to have more adventures back in the Wolfsmark with Cerine and Sienna and co. later. While I was trying to think of what kind of setting to make, I waffled between fantasy and sci-fi and ultimately decided on sci-fi (Wolfsmark is fantasy, plus Aristalle next door is SUPER fantasy) because I love to write optimistic, bright sci-fi settings. Then I realized I could expand the little universe I had for Ciri and Tallis, because Ciri is a blast to write for. And it all clicked together n.n
Bear with me a bit because this story is a lot of introduction for Auri and Zevah and the world at large, plus a budding romance between them. Expansion stories will come, I've got outlines/ideas already writtenand there's foreshadowing in this story for Auri's waistline XD I'll be posting the second and third chapters in the next couple days!
Buxom snow leopard and beefy lioness
Your favorite (maybe) medical synth
Futuristic space opera setting
Slow burn romance
Out on the fringe of known space, the planet Chelios orbits a strange blue star that gives off unique radiation. While the Astral Research Orbital Station observes it from up close, Chelios City on the planet's surface provides a space for civilians to live and other research to be conducted. So when Auri's best friend, who left for the planet years ago, offers her a spare room in her new apartment, the snow leopard leaps at the chance for adventure - and to be beside the lioness again. But for Zevah, a gregarious and enthusiastic lioness, having Auri within paw's reach again stirs up buried feelings...
The beginning of a new setting for Auri and friends n.n I've hit a wall on Northend ideas for a while, so this will help shake things loose to have more adventures back in the Wolfsmark with Cerine and Sienna and co. later. While I was trying to think of what kind of setting to make, I waffled between fantasy and sci-fi and ultimately decided on sci-fi (Wolfsmark is fantasy, plus Aristalle next door is SUPER fantasy) because I love to write optimistic, bright sci-fi settings. Then I realized I could expand the little universe I had for Ciri and Tallis, because Ciri is a blast to write for. And it all clicked together n.n
Bear with me a bit because this story is a lot of introduction for Auri and Zevah and the world at large, plus a budding romance between them. Expansion stories will come, I've got outlines/ideas already written
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Category Story / Fantasy
Species Snow Leopard
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File Size 113 kB
Finally got around to reading this. Thanks for your patience with me Cerine! These are mostly notes that I jotted down while reading, so it might be a little disorganized. But you clearly put a lot of effort into writing this, and I want to try and provide a review that returns the favor, if even just a little.
Can we please have a Ciri medical exam ASMR? I would pay good money for that... actually, while we're on the subject, can I get some of that chemical therapy? I love how you described it as having a blanket yanked off, I can totally imagine how it feels based on your description. How nice would it be to go from feeling a little under the weather to feeling great again in such a short time.
Been a while since I've read one of your stories that has Ciri in it, and her introduction is nice. "Intimidating and calming" is a great description for any character imo.
You added an extra "her" after "her own" on page 2 while describing Auri's uh... buxom-ness. 10 pages and this was the only error I found. Amazing!
And yes, Auri is quite pretty! I like how you described Ciri's cartoon "raindrop," I wonder if that's been drawn before?
Zevah's intro is great. "The kind of person who could ignite a star with a smile... and have a blast doing it." That whole sentence is a wonderful way to introduce her, I know exactly what her personality is like from this. Great work!
...oh yeah, and the later description of her beefy body is lovely as well. How cool would it be to see someone for the first time in years, only for them to have transformed dramatically! I want to have this effect on someone someday.
"I think I might've died on that exam table." No wait, don't say that Auri! You'll get attract all those garbage-tier fan theories about popular children's shows!
Never realized that Auri purrs, even though that makes total sense. Oops. That's so cute! Good fanart idea. I bet she'd purr when she gets a big hug from a big lioness...! Or maybe a nice hug from a dragon too...?
Maybe a minor detail, but I like how you have your characters interacting in their environments. It feels a lot more realistic than just describing the area. For example I like how you included Auri getting vertigo from looking at the drop to the park, and Zev keeping her balance. Clever way to combine worldbuilding with some more character interaction!
I feel like the reveal of Zev's synthetic leg is natural, too. I like the amount of detail you gave to that reveal. It wasn't too light; they didn't just gloss over it. But at the same time you didn't dump a bunch of exposition either. It feels like a normal conversation to have on such an important aesthetic change. And the reasoning behind the color difference is funny, but I can't help but think that might hold some significance later (or was just discolored so that Auri would notice it).
Whew, that is one hell of a cliffhanger at the end, too. I can tell these two ladies have awesome chemistry, even before Zev started breaking down at the end there. You've done a great job at showing two characters who are interested in each other but either holding back feelings or being in a state of shock from traveling and aren't ready to grip at intense emotions. It's very impressive. Zev's actions at the very end honestly feel completely deserves, since it's clear in this story that she's holding back (like when she has a brief moment at the restaurant). And she doesn't offer a hug to Auri at night; Auri's the one who initiates that. That's the catalyst, I think...
A lot of this part of the story has been character intros and worldbuilding. My assumption is that you haven't even gotten the main plot yet and you enjoyed the worldbuilding aspect so much that you focused on it more than you expected to! I can tell you like writing Ciri a lot too, since you're great at it and she's present for a solid portion of the story. Being able to write 10 pages this rapidly is incredible, really. I can't wait to find out how the story developments (and how the relationship develops).
You're doing a great job.
Can we please have a Ciri medical exam ASMR? I would pay good money for that... actually, while we're on the subject, can I get some of that chemical therapy? I love how you described it as having a blanket yanked off, I can totally imagine how it feels based on your description. How nice would it be to go from feeling a little under the weather to feeling great again in such a short time.
Been a while since I've read one of your stories that has Ciri in it, and her introduction is nice. "Intimidating and calming" is a great description for any character imo.
You added an extra "her" after "her own" on page 2 while describing Auri's uh... buxom-ness. 10 pages and this was the only error I found. Amazing!
And yes, Auri is quite pretty! I like how you described Ciri's cartoon "raindrop," I wonder if that's been drawn before?
Zevah's intro is great. "The kind of person who could ignite a star with a smile... and have a blast doing it." That whole sentence is a wonderful way to introduce her, I know exactly what her personality is like from this. Great work!
...oh yeah, and the later description of her beefy body is lovely as well. How cool would it be to see someone for the first time in years, only for them to have transformed dramatically! I want to have this effect on someone someday.
"I think I might've died on that exam table." No wait, don't say that Auri! You'll get attract all those garbage-tier fan theories about popular children's shows!
Never realized that Auri purrs, even though that makes total sense. Oops. That's so cute! Good fanart idea. I bet she'd purr when she gets a big hug from a big lioness...! Or maybe a nice hug from a dragon too...?
Maybe a minor detail, but I like how you have your characters interacting in their environments. It feels a lot more realistic than just describing the area. For example I like how you included Auri getting vertigo from looking at the drop to the park, and Zev keeping her balance. Clever way to combine worldbuilding with some more character interaction!
I feel like the reveal of Zev's synthetic leg is natural, too. I like the amount of detail you gave to that reveal. It wasn't too light; they didn't just gloss over it. But at the same time you didn't dump a bunch of exposition either. It feels like a normal conversation to have on such an important aesthetic change. And the reasoning behind the color difference is funny, but I can't help but think that might hold some significance later (or was just discolored so that Auri would notice it).
Whew, that is one hell of a cliffhanger at the end, too. I can tell these two ladies have awesome chemistry, even before Zev started breaking down at the end there. You've done a great job at showing two characters who are interested in each other but either holding back feelings or being in a state of shock from traveling and aren't ready to grip at intense emotions. It's very impressive. Zev's actions at the very end honestly feel completely deserves, since it's clear in this story that she's holding back (like when she has a brief moment at the restaurant). And she doesn't offer a hug to Auri at night; Auri's the one who initiates that. That's the catalyst, I think...
A lot of this part of the story has been character intros and worldbuilding. My assumption is that you haven't even gotten the main plot yet and you enjoyed the worldbuilding aspect so much that you focused on it more than you expected to! I can tell you like writing Ciri a lot too, since you're great at it and she's present for a solid portion of the story. Being able to write 10 pages this rapidly is incredible, really. I can't wait to find out how the story developments (and how the relationship develops).
You're doing a great job.
Thank you so much for the review! n.n
Yes, I LOVE writing Ciri, and it's one of the main reasons I wanted to combine these characters! I haven't had her drawn with the sweatdrop holo-emoji before, but one of the pics I have of her is her projecting a heart: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/51223379/
And the comment on Zev being very different since they met again is something I love, too, and I wrote the same with Cerine and Megan in Megan's first story n.n
I'm glad you think they have great chemistry, Zevah is so different from my other characters who tend to be shy, reserved, or weird, so I am glad that she is very believable!
Yes, I LOVE writing Ciri, and it's one of the main reasons I wanted to combine these characters! I haven't had her drawn with the sweatdrop holo-emoji before, but one of the pics I have of her is her projecting a heart: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/51223379/
And the comment on Zev being very different since they met again is something I love, too, and I wrote the same with Cerine and Megan in Megan's first story n.n
I'm glad you think they have great chemistry, Zevah is so different from my other characters who tend to be shy, reserved, or weird, so I am glad that she is very believable!
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