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Warm gray critter in a cold gray world. I gotta get me some more gray pencils.
I think I'm happier with this piece than with anything else yet. It flowed out pretty smoothly and I didn't have to agonize over anything accept maybe a little BG at the very last. I made some rocks, a first I think, and I kind of had fun doing them. I didn't have fun doing the extreme BG mountain/ snow /cloud tops, also a first.
Definitely had fun doing her and did her relatively fast. Next time though I'll tone down on the fur texture and do it where it really needs to be. It ended up being a little course although the photo is a bit out of focus and a lot of the texturing is hard to see.
I'll be getting a proper scan in a couple weeks otherwise a camera shot for now.
I'd really like to get critique on this one and point out points to be improved upon and especially what I could have or could still do to the BG as I do plan on going back in and make tweaks and fixes as I see them over the next few days then fixative.
Warm gray critter in a cold gray world. I gotta get me some more gray pencils.
I think I'm happier with this piece than with anything else yet. It flowed out pretty smoothly and I didn't have to agonize over anything accept maybe a little BG at the very last. I made some rocks, a first I think, and I kind of had fun doing them. I didn't have fun doing the extreme BG mountain/ snow /cloud tops, also a first.
Definitely had fun doing her and did her relatively fast. Next time though I'll tone down on the fur texture and do it where it really needs to be. It ended up being a little course although the photo is a bit out of focus and a lot of the texturing is hard to see.
I'll be getting a proper scan in a couple weeks otherwise a camera shot for now.
I'd really like to get critique on this one and point out points to be improved upon and especially what I could have or could still do to the BG as I do plan on going back in and make tweaks and fixes as I see them over the next few days then fixative.
Category All / All
Species Leopard
Size 1280 x 960px
File Size 188.6 kB
Hey there Teiirka! First of all I'd like to say that I love the work that you do, and it warms my heart to see you asking for critique, I hope you don't mind if I do so.
First off all I want to say that the detail on this, especially on her clothing is wonderful, and I'm an avid lover of small details. The lower body while having such nice fur detail looks a bit strange. At least from what I see the legs themselves look a bit unnatural at least for these reasons: The thigh from the top leg looks rather short, compared to the other part of the leg, also the one that is underneath looks disjointed from the socket considering the way the hips themselves are place. Just to keep in mind the top leg seems longer than the one at the bottom. That kind of reclining is hard to get right sometimes.
Tails are hard to do but I do like how you’re set it up. So props to you on that!
Other than that the arm that is holding up the staff looks very short, but I understand that fur is rather demanding and sometimes the darker value can get lost while working on small details. But I think it’s good that you’re going to cut down a bit on the fur texture, it’ll help you focus on larger things. Foreshortening is a pain sometimes, especially when it comes to the arm.
The use of the fabric is wonderful, and faint colour it gives off on her abdomen is a wonderful touch! The flow of the hair is gorgeous and your use of colours makes me feel all warm and fuzzy. The rocks look amazing to me, I loooove how you handle them.
Anyways I hope that this can somehow help you out.
First off all I want to say that the detail on this, especially on her clothing is wonderful, and I'm an avid lover of small details. The lower body while having such nice fur detail looks a bit strange. At least from what I see the legs themselves look a bit unnatural at least for these reasons: The thigh from the top leg looks rather short, compared to the other part of the leg, also the one that is underneath looks disjointed from the socket considering the way the hips themselves are place. Just to keep in mind the top leg seems longer than the one at the bottom. That kind of reclining is hard to get right sometimes.
Tails are hard to do but I do like how you’re set it up. So props to you on that!
Other than that the arm that is holding up the staff looks very short, but I understand that fur is rather demanding and sometimes the darker value can get lost while working on small details. But I think it’s good that you’re going to cut down a bit on the fur texture, it’ll help you focus on larger things. Foreshortening is a pain sometimes, especially when it comes to the arm.
The use of the fabric is wonderful, and faint colour it gives off on her abdomen is a wonderful touch! The flow of the hair is gorgeous and your use of colours makes me feel all warm and fuzzy. The rocks look amazing to me, I loooove how you handle them.
Anyways I hope that this can somehow help you out.
Thank you for the wonderful critique! It is most definitely helpful. Yes, foreshortening is still somewhat a mystery to me but hopefully in the coming year, I'll be able to work on it more than I've been allowed by time.
Should the knee have been placed a little farther out? Now that you point it out I can definite see the problem there. The staff arm was one of the first things I worked on and was thinking of ways to give it more perspective. Would it have helped if I had made the forearm thicker and the hand a little bigger? I had thought about doing that but didn't want to get carried away with it. (chickened out).
I have an even more detailed piece, pose wise, in the works right now and will be posting a cleaned up sketch in a day or two. I'll work on the anatomy issue. Thanks.
Should the knee have been placed a little farther out? Now that you point it out I can definite see the problem there. The staff arm was one of the first things I worked on and was thinking of ways to give it more perspective. Would it have helped if I had made the forearm thicker and the hand a little bigger? I had thought about doing that but didn't want to get carried away with it. (chickened out).
I have an even more detailed piece, pose wise, in the works right now and will be posting a cleaned up sketch in a day or two. I'll work on the anatomy issue. Thanks.
Well the way the legs are posed reminds me of this rather similar pose: http://www.posemaniacs.com/archives/249 (you can turn it around by dragging it around)
Do you normally do thumbnail sketches before you start on the big piece? Just a curious question.
What would help a lot more to give that arm definition would be the musculature on her shoulder and how it connects to the armpit/tricep area. The forearm could just a bit thicker or at least show the curve of the forearm and make it more pronounced. Unless if I'm totally reading the position of her arm wrong. It's supposed to be coming towards the viewer correct?
Also sometimes if you're unsure do some practice sketches, it helps get rid of the jitters sometimes. :3
Do you normally do thumbnail sketches before you start on the big piece? Just a curious question.
What would help a lot more to give that arm definition would be the musculature on her shoulder and how it connects to the armpit/tricep area. The forearm could just a bit thicker or at least show the curve of the forearm and make it more pronounced. Unless if I'm totally reading the position of her arm wrong. It's supposed to be coming towards the viewer correct?
Also sometimes if you're unsure do some practice sketches, it helps get rid of the jitters sometimes. :3
I have been watching your WIP posts for this piece since you started and have anticipated seeing the finished work. It really came together with the background and finishing touches, you should be very pleased! As somebody mentioned above, the blue garments serve as a nice contrast to all the other grayscale tones throughout the image -- you did a nice job with the transparency on the fabric. The overall anatomy of the pose looks good as well -- digitigrade legs can be a big challenge! Along with all that, her fur and expression (and piercing blue gaze) also come together to really make this a magical piece.
So now for the only critique poinst I can find: I actually would disagree on "toning down" the fur texture, overall. Snow leopards are furry, furry things. The only spot it might seem "coarse" is along her belly, between loin and breasts... and possibly on her throat. I also second rikufanattic's point about the arm that is holding up the staff -- when I eyeball it her forearm is about the same length as the one she's bracing against, and perspective should make that the smaller of the two.
So now for the only critique poinst I can find: I actually would disagree on "toning down" the fur texture, overall. Snow leopards are furry, furry things. The only spot it might seem "coarse" is along her belly, between loin and breasts... and possibly on her throat. I also second rikufanattic's point about the arm that is holding up the staff -- when I eyeball it her forearm is about the same length as the one she's bracing against, and perspective should make that the smaller of the two.
There are three primary things that look a bit off to me; first is her left arm holding the staff. I'm sorry that I can't really say much to help but there's something off in the foreshortening in it.
Second is her right breast it looks awfully low for where her collar bone should be, although now that I look at it more, both her arm and breast may be good and it's her head that's not in quite the right place, maybe down and to the viewer's left somewhat.
Third was the proportions to her legs, the thigh looks too short while her shins are too long, also her footpaws may be a bit small.
I do really like how you did the drape of the cloth and her face though, it looks really nice.
Second is her right breast it looks awfully low for where her collar bone should be, although now that I look at it more, both her arm and breast may be good and it's her head that's not in quite the right place, maybe down and to the viewer's left somewhat.
Third was the proportions to her legs, the thigh looks too short while her shins are too long, also her footpaws may be a bit small.
I do really like how you did the drape of the cloth and her face though, it looks really nice.
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