You may want to work on your writing too.
It is REALLY hard to read what they are saying =/

From your first page, I noticed it was highly confusing, but things are falling into place. The obvious "who's there" is a bit...common but hey.

Anyways, try working on your writing and line-art a bit eh?

well, im not good at my english and writing :(
i'll will try. thanks for the tip :D

Well, I decided to help you out on that because you have the potential for it.

Try getting some english and writing classes, and take some art courses, it should help :)

i normaly get english lessons at ,y school. i might try to find out about some art cources. thank for saying i have the potential ^^

Your welcome :P