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Telling vs Showing Examples

Hana was feeling happier than she had in a long time. She wanted to seek out Emilia and tell her everything that had just happened, but she couldn’t find her anywhere. When she got back to her room and opened the door, she saw a cat run and hide under the bed. Frowning, she followed the cat to get a better look at it. She was surprised to see that the cat’s eyes looked exactly like Emilia’s.

Telling: Hana was feeling happier than she had in a long time.

Showing: Hana did her best to fight the stupid grin spreading across her face, but the mirth inside her threatened to bubble up into hysterical laughter. Her steps were lighter than they had been in weeks.

Telling:  She wanted to seek out Emilia and tell her everything that had just happened, but she couldn’t find her anywhere.

Showing: As she made her way back from the war room, her eyes darted to every face that looked her way, searching for Emilia’s bright blue eyes. She had to know what had just happened. 

Telling: When she got back to her room and opened the door, she saw a cat run and hide under the bed.

Showing: After ten minutes of searching, Hana sighed, resigned to hold in the good news until Emilia sought her out. As she pushed open the door to her own room, a flash of black crossed her vision and dove under the little bed in the corner. A cat?

Telling: Frowning, she followed the cat to get a better look at it.

Showing: Hana moved further into the room and shut the door behind her, brows furrowing. As far as she knew, no one in the bunker owned a cat. She sank to her knees and lifted up the blankets dangling over the edge of the bed.

Telling: She was surprised to see that the cat’s eyes looked exactly like Emilia’s.

Showing: When she saw the bright blue eyes of the cat staring back at her, almost owlishly, her heart almost hit the floor. She knew instantly what was going on here. “Emilia?”

Hana did her best to fight the stupid grin spreading across her face, but the mirth inside her threatened to bubble up into hysterical laughter. Her steps were lighter than they had been in weeks. As she made her way back from the war room, her eyes darted to every face that looked her way, searching for Emilia’s bright blue eyes. She had to know what had just happened. After ten minutes of searching, Hana sighed, resigned to hold in the good news until Emilia sought her out. 
As she pushed open the door to her own room, a flash of black crossed her vision and dove under the little bed in the corner. A cat? Hana moved further into the room and shut the door behind her, brows furrowing. As far as she knew, no one in the bunker owned a cat. She sank to her knees and lifted up the blankets dangling over the edge of the bed. When she saw the bright blue eyes of the cat staring back at her, almost owlishly, her heart almost hit the floor. She knew instantly what was going on here. “Emilia?”

For people who are confused when and how to use showing and telling, and their differences.

This photo helped me a lot and I thought I should shared it!!! If you need me to explain I’d be happy to~

I wanna be a fantasy creature biologist/vet

“The story that the people of these towns brought home siren lovers and then flushed them into the sewer system when they got aggressive is a myth. There are no sirens in the sewers.”

“You can’t just release your dragon when you don’t want it anymore, or because you think it’s ‘more ethical’. It isn’t. He’ll grow a hundred times this size and because he’s used to being fed, he relies on humans for everything. A lot of people will end up hurt, and your dragon will be killed.”

“You can’t keep a unicorn inside your house, you need a proper stable and a lot of land. The same goes for Pegasus.”

“Your boyfriend isn’t coming home with hair on his shirt because he’s having an affair, he’s coming home with hair on his shirt because he’s a WEREWOLF.”

A quick list of hobbies a character can have

So, whenever I write, I try to give the more important character’s some hobbies even if it’s not important to the plot to make sure they feel real, everybody in real life has at least one hobby! Or fifteen if you’re like me and know no chill… yet despite this, I find myself repeating the same hobbies over and over again. Specifically the hobbies I partake in the most and know the most about, but you don’t need to have personal experience or be an expert on something to write it as a side detail for a fictional character. 

So, to offer up some variety, here is a long list of hobbies I could think of to give to characters, some are more general because I have no idea about them, some are more specific, feel free to reblog and add more! (In fact that would be amazing because I still feel like I struggle to think of original hobbies, maybe if it’s a hobby you partake in you could even explain a bit about it to help writers?) 

If you’re going to use a hobby and have them actually partake in it over the course of your story, don’t forget to research either by finding and asking somebody who does it or using the marvellous internet.

-Painting (watercolour, acrylic, oil painting)

-Pencil sketching

-Crafts (maybe they build little towers out of cardboard when they have some spare time?) 

-Reading

-Writing (if you know how to do poetry but your book isn’t about poetry, this is a cool way to include it!) 

-Gardening

-Cooking or Baking 

-Horse-back riding (saves them have to learn it later on if it’s normal in your book!) 

-Animal training (they train dogs on the weekend because why not?) 

-Rock painting (this can be incorporated by them collecting pretty and smooth rocks at several points in the adventure only to be found painting them in their spare time)

-Journaling 

-Photography 

-Pottery 

-Sewing

-Knitting 

-Makeup 

-Soap-making 

-Singing or playing an instrument 

-Candle-making 

-Wax Seals 

-Board games or card games 

-Roleplaying (you know, like dungeons and dragons?)

-Costumes (could go together with the roleplaying or the sewing one!) 

-Perfume making 

-Some kind of exercise (gymnastics, running, swimming…)

-Hiking (I know it could be in the above option but just think of the possibilities this opens up! You can go on romantic walks and explore hidden corners in nearby places!) 

-Wood work

-Sculpting

-Glass Art

-People watching

-Interior design 

-Indie journalism 

-Puzzles 

-Clothe design 

-Modelling 

-Bird watching 

-Hunting 

-Hair styling

-Jewellery making 

-Patchwork 

-Watching films is popular these days, and you could watch plays or theatre if we’re talking none contemporary fantasy! 

-Coin collecting

-Choose your own adventure books

-Dancing

-Finding and listening to street music 

-Acting

-Improvisation or other form of comedy 

-Calligraphy 

-Stone skipping 

-Seashell collecting 

-Bug collecting

-Or anything collecting really 

-Languages 

-Knot tying 

-History 

-Map making 

As usual,  check out my socials and book here.

I’ll probably be doing another update on the finances of my book soon, because this should go up on the day my first sale ends. So if you’re interested in that financial side of indie publishing, feel free to stick around, or if you’re interested in a variety of writing advice, that too! 

Writing idea

A medieval village sends a young knight out on their first mission, somethings been drinking the livestock dry, and the king concludes it’s the vampire living in the Forrest. Armed with garlic and wooden stakes, the knight ventures into the forest and busts down the door, of the small home only to see the vampire sitting calmly in a chair, drinking what appeared to be red wine. They didn’t even bother looking up at the knight. ‘How many knights must your king send to die before somebody realises he’s the one eating everything?’

Person A is a young royal who is desperate to escape their upcoming arranged marriage, and they seize their last chance after discovering a secret tunnel out of the palace. The tunnel, however, leads directly into a barn owned by Person B, a peasant who is shocked to find a member of the royal family sleeping in their hayloft.

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cuddling prompts

  • falling asleep with your head on person A's lap/them playing with your hair
  • person A being carried to bed, as they're tucked in A reaches for person B, pulling them into bed and under the sheets
  • using your lover's shoulder/stomach as a pillow
  • falling asleep in person A's arms while they're playing video games
  • huddling for warmth during a cold winter's day
  • person A plays with bubbles in the bathtub, person B tries to avoid being splashed by them
  • cuddling under the stars, falling asleep in each other's arms
  • a snow fight ending with the two lovers falling onto the ground and into each other's arms, erupting into laughter
  • drawing circles on your lover's chest/listening to their heartbeat
  • i know you're scared of thunderstorms but you're safe in my arms
  • person A shows up at person B's door, having been in a bad fight with a loved one, hoping to spend the night in person B's bed for some extra comfort
  • morning cuddles because the day doesn't have to start just yet
  • a hand placed between your lover's thighs or on their [nsfw] boob
  • for whatever reason, we can't be together, but let's spend one last night in each other's arms because neither of us are ready to let go
  • you're sick, and would rather me stay away so i don't get sick as well, but i'm determined and we spend the next couple of hours watching bad rom-coms
  • as my best friend, you're required to give me cuddles because i am sad and touch deprived
  • my ex was great at cuddling so you've made it your mission to prove you're better
  • cuddling on the couch, silently watching your kids play around the house
  • a text sent at one am asking if you're available for some cuddles
  • most people wouldn't cuddle in the pouring rain but we're built different [drOP EVERYTHING NOW, MEET ME IN THE POURING RAIN, KISS ME ON THE SIDEWALK, TAKE AWAY THE PAin]

random places prompts list

you can use them as settings, for example
romance: have your otp go on a date here fantasy: build your world around it
  • lively pier
  • pretty garden
  • a fountain that sprinkles glitters
  • overgrown ruins
  • a little thatched hut
  • a sealed perfumed tomb 
  • observatory with sculptured myths
  • a lagoon
  • pirate tavern
  • forest with weird fruits
  • an abandoned castle ballroom
  • haunted treehouse

𝐒𝐄𝐓𝐓𝐋𝐈𝐍𝐆 𝐃𝐔𝐒𝐓 𝐏𝐑𝐎𝐌𝐏𝐓𝐒.

basically i was looking over the protective prompts and the hero prompts and it hit me that like. the unbridled angst and vibes of the whole “post-battle” scene, or a scene set after an attack or a disaster or smth, needs to be ADDRESSED!!! and so y’all get the full weight of my angst today, sprinkled with a lot of teamwork and selfless and sacrificing vibes. i hope you enjoy! do NOT add further contributions to this list!!! i will curse your potato crops!!!

DIALOGUE PROMPTS.

  • “ can you hear me? hey… [NAME], can you hear my voice? “
  • “ come on… wake up. please… please wake up… “
  • “ oh! oh, thank god! i thought we lost you… “
  • “ hey, hey… look at me, okay? you gotta get up now. you think you might be able to walk? ‘cause they sent for back-up, and if they find us… we cannot let them find us. understand? “
  • “ go, go! save yourself! i’ll buy you some time! “
  • “ we both know i’m not walking out of this one. it’s okay, alright? it’s okay… just… do me a favor, will you? will you make them pay for this? i don’t care how. but… don’t let them get away with it. “
  • “ hey, how badly are you hurt? can you move? you think you can walk? “
  • “ if you can’t walk, i’m gonna have to carry you, alright? we can’t stay here. “
  • “ hey, look at me. i’m slowing you down, we both know it. it’s okay. i’ll hide and wait for back-up; you get yourself out of here. “
  • “ you’re gonna need to climb up on my back, you’re slowing us down with that injury. “
  • “ will you quit talking like that?! i’m not leaving you behind! “
  • “ what the hell are you doing here?! i told you to get out of here! “
  • “ you’re shivering… hey. hey, listen to me, okay? everything’s gonna be alright, i promise. here… take my jacket. don’t worry, i’m warm-blooded. “
  • “ i’ll get blood on your shirt… “
  • “ hey, don’t you dare close your eyes, you hear me? you die in my arms, and i’m gonna stick the dry-cleaning bill for this shirt in your coffin, that’s a promise! “
  • “ i know we almost died just now, but… am i the only one who’s hungry? “
  • “ we need to get you to a hospital… “
  • “ hey, come on now… you’re okay. you’re good, right? “
  • “ i must be hurt pretty bad if you’re being this nice to me. “
  • “ quit playing the martyr. we’re not leaving you behind. “
  • “ you know, i hate to be the negative voice, but… did… did we just lose? “
  • “ look at me… i’m not gonna make it. it’s okay, i’m fine with that. but… you can’t stay here. you’ve got a good long life ahead of you. and you’re smart, too; too smart to wait around here and waste that long life. so you get out of here, and you go live that life. live it for both of us. will you promise me you’ll do that? “
  • “ back-up isn’t coming. is it? we’re on our own, right? “
  • “ can’t sleep, huh? it’s okay. it’s probably all that adrenaline and shock; i can’t sleep, either. wanna keep each other company? “
  • “ i don’t give two shits about the back-up; i’m just happy you’re alive. “

ACTION PROMPTS.

as always, add a “+ REVERSE” to switch the roles!
  • [ CARRY ]:     having found the receiver in an injured/weak/unconscious state, the sender carries them in their arms to safety.
  • [ TILT ]:     the sender gently tilts the receiver’s chin up so that they can check to see if they’re okay.
  • [ PULL ]:     sender takes the fallen receiver’s hands and carefully pulls them up so that they’re standing once more.
  • [ WAIST ]:     sender, while physically supporting and steadying the receiver, loops an arm around their waist for extra support.
  • [ BACK ]:     sender crouches down slightly to let the wounded receiver climb on their back, giving them a piggy-back ride to safety afterwards.
  • [ HAIR ]:     while in the process of checking the receiver for injuries or other signs of harm, the sender gently brushes several strands of hair from their eyes.
  • [ TEND ]:     sender begins to care for the receiver’s injuries.
  • [ LEAN ]:     the wounded sender leans against the receiver for physical support.
  • [ SUPPORT ]:     the sender encourages the wounded receiver to lean against them for physical support.
  • [ PUSH ]:     the sender gently pushes the receiver back to lie down so they can check them properly for injuries.
  • [ COAT ]:     sender removes their jacket and drapes it around the shoulders of the trembling receiver.
  • [ BLANKET ]:     just as they’re all about to go to sleep, the sender covers the receiver with their own blanket.
  • [ AWAKE ]:     the sender, unable to sleep, gets up to go for a walk, and finds that the receiver is also unable to sleep.
  • [ TOGETHER ]:     when the receiver awakens, they discover that the sender has been sleeping next to them, arms wrapped around one another for warmth, comfort, protection ( or something more… )
  • [ BANDAGE ]:     the sender sits down across from the receiver and begins to bandage their wounds.
  • [ DRAG ]:     unable to leave them behind, the sender drags the wounded receiver out of danger and into a safe hiding place for both of them to wait until help arrives.
  • [ TOUCH ]:     the sender nudges or touches the receiver to check and see if they’re alright after the attack.
  • [ CLEAN ]:     the sender gently and carefully begins to bathe the blood/soot/ash/dirt from the receiver’s skin during a moment of calm.
  • [ PRIORITY ]:     when they arrive at a designated safe place, the sender refuses to be examined or cared for until the receiver is taken care of first.
  • [ PROMISE ]:     before leaving to get help/food/water/a rescue mission etc, the sender assures and promises the receiver that they’ll return safely, refusing to bring them along or to stay behind.
  • [ BROKEN ]:     after having promised the receiver that they’d return, it’s learned that the sender died during their mission. how does the receiver respond?
  • [ TRAPPED ]:     after having promised the receiver that they’d return from a mission, the receiver learns that the sender has been kidnapped or otherwise trapped, requiring a rescue mission to bring them home.
  • [ RESCUE ]:     the sender and receiver reunite after the sender embarked upon an infamously perilous rescue mission to save the receiver.
  • [ FOUND ]:     after a massive rescue mission to try and find the missing receiver, the sender is the first to find them just as the efforts are about to be abandoned.
  • [ HOPE ]:     just as the receiver is about to lose hope in ever finding the sender again, a message or clue of some kind is discovered that essentially guarantees that the sender is still alive, restoring the receiver’s hope once more.
  • [ CLING ]:     having finally been reunited, the sender pulls the receiver into a tight, overwhelmingly relieved embrace, clinging to them and burying their face in their shoulder. the whole deal. make it EMOTIONAL–
  • [ TEARS ]:     having finally found the receiver, or having finally been found by the receiver, the sender breaks down in tears of relief, fear, and many other emotions as they officially reunite.
  • [ SACRIFICE ]:     knowing that the circumstances only allow one of them to survive, the sender sacrifices their life in order to guarantee the receiver’s survival and safety.

Narrative Botox: Filler Words and Phrases to Look Out For

If you’re planning on publishing traditionally, chances are you keep a sharp eye on your word count. Literary agents and publishing houses are on the hunt for the best quality stories that they can print for the cheapest price (using the least paper and ink), so you have a higher chance of gaining representation if you can crank your novel out in the least words possible.

However, filler words and phrases aren’t only the enemies of aspiring traditional authors; every writer—fanfic, novelist, journalist, you name it!—should try to eliminate filler from their stories to assure more concise and high-quality writing. Oftentimes, filler contributes nothing but clutter, and without it, your narrative can flow smoother and in a more sophisticated manner.

But how do you know what’s filler and what’s not? Here are some tips on how to Ctrl+F and kick this narrative botox to the curb!

I compiled these lists with the help of Infusionmedia, BDR Publishing, and ResetEra !

Filler Words

1. Just

A writer’s worst enemy, and the bane of my manuscripts’ existences. Eliminating all the ‘just’s can cut down your word count by hundreds.

2. “That” as a conjunction

It’s an unnecessary addition to a sentence, which will be more streamlined without it.

  • Example: “He said that he wouldn’t do it again.”
  • Revised: “He said he wouldn’t do it again.”

3. “Now” as an adverb

“Now” is essential if you’re talking about the past and present, but when you’re using it to draw attention to a particular statement or point.

  • Example:Now, I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”
  • Revised: “I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”

4. Redundant adverbs

These adverbs serve no purpose because the verbs they’re describing already imply the way the action is performed.

  • Whispering softly
  • Yelling loudly
  • Crying sadly
  • Laughing happily

5. “Telling” words

These words are redundant, especially when using first person, because in describing an event, we can already assume that the characters are experiencing it.

  • Seeing/saw
  • Feeling/felt
  • Hearing/heard
  • Smelling/smelled

6. “Clarifying” words used to portray definiteness or indefiniteness

Although these are meant to help out the readers get their bearings on a situation, all they do is come across as wishy-washy! Be concise and sure of yourself!

  • About
  • Absolutely
  • Accordingly
  • Actually
  • Almost
  • Basically
  • Certainly
  • Clearly
  • Completely
  • Entirely
  • Even
  • Exactly
  • Fairly
  • Highly
  • Hopefully
  • Literally
  • Maybe
  • Only
  • Often
  • Oftentimes
  • Perhaps
  • Possibly
  • Probably
  • Quite
  • Rather
  • Really
  • Reasonably
  • Relatively
  • Seem
  • Seriously
  • Simply
  • Slightly
  • Some
  • Somehow
  • Sometimes
  • Totally
  • Very

Filler Phrases

1.“Let out (vocal noise)”

Use the verb instead!

  • Example: “He let out a sigh.”
  • Revised: “He sighed.”

2. Using passive voice

Passive voice inflates your word count by including various “to be” verbs into the prose. Passive voice involves actions happening to a subject rather than the subject performing an action, and as a result isn’t as riveting to the reader as active voice; even if it wasn’t a matter of word count, you’d still want to get rid of it anyway!

Still don’t know what I’m talking about? Check out this article from Grammarly.

  • Example: “The boy was bitten by the dog on his arm.”
  • Revised: “The dog bit the boy on his arm.”

3. Describing the wrong noun

Many writers will be as specific as possible about what “thing” is affected by the event they’re describing, when it’s much simpler to take a step back and write about something more general.

  • Example: “The level of water rose.”
  • Revised: “The water rose.”

4. Phrasal verbs

Phrasal verbs are the combination of two or three words from different grammatical categories—a verb and an adverb or a preposition—to form a single action. Usually, these phrasal verbs can be replaced by a single-word verb.

  • “Ask for” can be replaced with “request”
  • “Bring down” can be replaced with “reduce”
  • “Come across” can be replaced with “find”
  • Etc.

5. Clarifying phrases

Same reason as clarifying words. Get to the point!

  • A bit
  • A little
  • A lot
  • In a sense
  • Kind of
  • Sort of

6. Remember your contractions!

Even if your story takes place in olden times, I can guarantee that if you never use any contractions ever, your story’s gonna be a clunky mess. But sometimes you’re in the moment, consumed by the poetic power of the muses, and forget that this isn’t a soap opera; so make sure you check that you’ve been using your contractions!

  • It is, it was, it would, she is, would not, should not, is not, does not etc.

7. Inflated phrases

These phrases can be replaced with more concise words.

  • Along the lines of (shorten to: like)
  • As a matter of fact (in fact)
  • As to whether (whether)
  • At all times (always)
  • At the present (now or currently)
  • At this point in time (now or currently)
  • Be able to/would(n’t) be able to (could or couldn’t)
  • Because of the fact that (because)
  • By means of (by)
  • Due to the fact that (because)
  • Even though (though or although)
  • For the purpose of (for)
  • For the reason that (because)
  • Have the ability to (could)
  • In light of the fact that (because)
  • In order to (to)
  • In regards to (on or about)
  • In spite of the fact that (though or although)
  • In the event that (if)
  • In the nature of (like)
  • In the neighborhood of (about)
  • On the occasion of (when)
  • On one/two separate occasions (Once/twice)
  • The/A majority of (most)
  • There is no doubt that (No doubt)
  • Wasn(n’t) capable of (could or couldn’t)

Hope this helped, and happy writing!

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