Sorry about that, and thank you for taking the time to give such detailed feedback.
I completely understand your frustration with the writing. I’m not a native English speaker, so I relied on AI to help “polish” the story, and unfortunately that resulted in exactly the kind of overwrought, generic phrasing you’re describing. Reading it back now, I agree it ended up feeling awkward, vague, and emotionally prescriptive in ways that hurt the experience rather than helping it.
Thanks again for the honest critique. It’s genuinely helpful, and I’ll take it into account if I revise or make something similar in the future.