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The epic dragon jam was great. There were a lot of awesome submissions for that one.

I already love the eldritch horror elements in this IF. I am looking forward to see how this story will develop ^_^

This is incredibly written.

This was awesome. The premise is really promising and the writing so far is engaging. I cannot wait to read the next update.

I am always happy to help. Whether you have questions about HTML5 in general or you ran into an issue in Twine. Also, thank you so much for playing my games. That honestly means a lot to me.

Thank you so much for playing ^_^

I am really glad you enjoyed it.

Most writing in IFs is pretty amateur since most of us are just people doing this as a hobby, so please do not feel discouraged from continuing. Writing like most art is just editing and reediting until one gets something that one is semi- happy with.

And, from what I read I think that your writing is actually pretty good.

I am somewhat experienced with Twine (Sugarcube) and I also know javascript, so I could help you out with coding or if you just need advice. 

I am not an expert by any means, but I am usually able to figure out solutions for the issues I encounter by foraging through the documentation for Twine and Html5. 

However, that often can be very time-consuming, so I understand that most people simply do not have the free time to do that.

If you are interested in speaking about this further, I have sent you a friendship request on Discord.

The game was made for a game jam so it is not in development anymore. But I still have the original files so I can patch the text to be faster

This update was really good. Cant wait for the next one ^_^

Read the first 2 chapters when they came out and they were really good ^_^

Cant wait to read chapter 3

Hiii, I am really happy that my advice was useful. Handling the code side of pronouns had been a major annoyance for me when I started out using twine.

Also thank you so much for the offer to credit me. I would greatly appreciate being credited, but please don't feel pressured to do so quickly.

In any case, I hope you are doing well and I wish you luck on your game dev journey ^_^

Thank you so much for playing ^_^

I am excited to show people how the characters will develop and all the twist and turns the plot is going to take.

I continued reading and I ended up really liking the way you handled the POV switch. I never read anything like that before in IFs.

The writing is good and the music adds to the atmosphere, but up to the point I read you have more control over Tommy than Zorlok. Even though the synopsis makes it clear that you are supposed to play as Zorlok.

To be honest it feels like Tommy is supposed to be the main POV character.

Edit: What I wrote above only applies to the prologue ^_^

At the start of Episode 1 you are in Zorlok's POV and I also would not change it because the way the reveal is written is really cool.

Promising game with a very interesting story although there are a few bugs.

In general you should store the pronoun sets as ints and use if macros to replace the entire sentence.

<<if $pronouns == 0>>\

They are hurt.\

<<else if $pronouns == 1>>\

She is hurt.\

<<else>>\

He is hurt.\

<<endif>>

You also should use "\" at the end of lines to remove the empty space created by them.

At the end of the second chapter in the tavern shortly before leaving the city the pronouns get reset to "she/her".

2024

Again thank you for taking the time to clarify and give me feedback.

The problem with the text probably has something to do with the resolution on certain phones.

Gonna see if I can find a way to fix this version and then I will update it as soon as possible.

The issue with the choices comes from me using buttons instead of links.

I am going to keep that in mind for when I update to the newest version.

Thank you so much for checking the game out despite the issues on mobile. 

I am not sure what you mean with broken. Are the UI elements overlapping or is it something else?

When I figure the issue out I will fix it as soon as possible.

Thank you so much for playing ^_^

OMG your project already looks really promising ^_^

In the second prologue the game won't let me progress past a certain point :(

Thank you so much for playing my game. I am currently adding farming too the new version of the game to make gameplay more interesting.

You exit after breaking 7 walls.

Thank you so much for playing my game, I appreciate the feedback :)

I tried mixing christmas and halloween, i have no idea if it worked out in the end :)