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A Man Named Doll (The Doll Series, #1)
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Oh, this one had so much potential for me, I loved the character, the story, especially the way it unfolded. But I have said many times the Fictive Dream is everything to this reader and I kept getting tossed out of the story with writing ticks (evil little blood sucking beasts). The over use of the conjunction and the passive voice ruined it for me. Without these issues this story might have gone the distance, been Raymond Chandleresk. This could be just on me, my writers eye not allowing me to enjoy a story where others might. The continual use of :and then there was, and then there were, and and, and, then then then, kept me at arms length. Yikes.
Some simple editing could've made this one stellar (for me)
And then there were the errors in the police procedure (see what I did right there) that could've been easily fixed with vetting by someone in law enforcement.
Some simple editing could've made this one stellar (for me)
And then there were the errors in the police procedure (see what I did right there) that could've been easily fixed with vetting by someone in law enforcement.
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April 22, 2021
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April 22, 2021
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April 23, 2021
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Apr 23, 2021 10:07AM
Oh this is such a wonderful review, David. I sure wish it had gone the distance for you. At least it wasn’t a complete turd. 😊
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Too bad this was just an "almost". And doubly sad that the things that tainted it could have easily been omitted. Oops. ;-) Your reviews continue to shed a bit of a different light on the books you read, David.
Kat (Books are Comfort Food) wrote: "Oh this is such a wonderful review, David. I sure wish it had gone the distance for you. At least it wasn’t a complete turd. 😊"Thank you Kat. This one had great potential, disappointing.
Zoeytron wrote: "Too bad this was just an "almost". And doubly sad that the things that tainted it could have easily been omitted. Oops. ;-) Your reviews continue to shed a bit of a different light on the books you..."Thank you Zoe. :-)
Thanks for reveiw, David! It happens that the very "ticks" you mention happen to annoy me too, and ruin a good story. I appreciate good writing, but am critical of the editing when it's so obvious (to you and me?).
I love the repetitive and then there were. It was fun, we were never allowed to do this at school and now this humorist does it shamelessly. And it works, it brins rythme.True that it becomes less fun when the book evolves but then the book becomes dark, there is nothing funny anymore and the repetitions are no good anymore.
